My letter to Mr Dastagir

Dear Mr Dastagir,

I would like to write to you about three problems: the lunch hall entrance, bullying and banta. Do these troubles affect our school? I believe so.

As a student of yours, I have been concerned. I have also witnessed and happen to be affected by these subjects. These issues can create lots of problems like being late for an activity during lunch or that someone has bullied someone and they’re not admitting it. This whole letter will show how I would like to resolve these problems.

I would like to complain about the entrance to the lunch hall first. I wasn’t aware that the year 10s and year 11s can go to lunch with the entrance in front of the reception office. This is bad because people may be late for not hurrying to go to the club or the extra lesson. I believe that if both the entrance in front of the playground and the one in front of the reception were two different entrances then life would be much more peaceful. As an extra, we can use the door by the canteen as an exit so there won’t be any trouble. Easy as banoffy pie!

I would also like to talk about bullying and how it can affect other students that can’t help themselves. I have been bullied many times in the past and kinda still am. I know anti-bullying week is already real but even during then, bullying still has an effect on many students. I believe that if a PSHE lesson was created to help bullies to stop being bullies then it can also help the victims who have been bullied. As well as that, the idea can help the bullies whether they have bad grades because they wouldn’t have time for these things: giving kids paralysing wedgies, make victims do their homework or make them wear kick-me signs.

The final thing I would like to complain about is banta. Many bullies use banta as a way to get out of trouble even when the victim doesn’t believe that is so. mainly, if a bully uses the word banta as a way to get out of trouble, then they have done a serious thing and it can be really harmful. The idea for resolving the bullying act is a great idea for this situation as well because it can show the bullies by telling them that they should be responsible for their actions. Also, it can help them to show what will happen if they continue with this. Great.

I know you will like the new lunch time exits and entrances and the anti-bullying PSHE lessons. If it still continues, these sanctions must be made by these steps:

1.) Thirty minutes detention.

2.) Hour detention.

3.) Referral.

4.) Exclusion.

I hope this works. Don’t forget to tell the children that they can’t redeem themselves at that point. The list only affects when the bullying/banta PSHE lessons has not worked.

Your sincerely,

Yonatan .T

One of your London Nautical School students in year seven.

 

 

 

 

3 Comments

  1. This is a fair start – but you have a long way to go.

    Targets
    1) Write a plan – this will help to develop ideas and structure
    2) Try to incorporate some of the persuasive techniques we have discussed in class.
    3) Aim to re-draft at least one paragraph in order to achieve the Perfect Paragraph badge
    http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-writing/perfect-paragraph/
    How will you meet this criteria?

  2. Some more targets for you…

    Whilst proof-reading and editing:
    1) Correct your spelling of the Headmaster’s name
    2) Learn the difference between affect and effect

  3. Hello,

    Please re-read your opening – my previous targets still apply!

    Let me know if you need some help,

    Mr North

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